Zackly. I can forgive the first comma, which comes after a folksy introductory phrase, but that subject/predicate interruption in the main clause is impardonnable.
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I would start by eliminating the comma between the subject and the predicate (one of my biggest pet peeves).
ReplyDeleteZackly. I can forgive the first comma, which comes after a folksy introductory phrase, but that subject/predicate interruption in the main clause is impardonnable.
ReplyDeleteI'm staying out of this one--above my pay grade.
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